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Re: OUF ShipDown OOC

Post  Kevlar on Sat Sep 26, 2009 5:33 am

Alright, Alicia's next piece is up, I had to shorten it a little bit, but its ok.

The 'actual' start of the mission (when we 'arrive' on planet) will happen sometime today/tomorrow in a one or two piece segment. So you have time maybe for one last post each before we are off the ship and down on the ground =)
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Post  Arashi Storm on Sat Sep 26, 2009 7:09 am

Kevlar wrote:those are some great posts.

Though tyren, could you edit the Cockpit to bridge? and ready to land to emerge from hyperspeed =P

Hyperspeed? I think its hyperspace. But close enough. hehe
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Post  Kevlar on Sat Sep 26, 2009 7:27 am

Arashi wrote:
Kevlar wrote:those are some great posts.

Though tyren, could you edit the Cockpit to bridge? and ready to land to emerge from hyperspeed =P

Hyperspeed? I think its hyperspace. But close enough. hehe

Yeah, I thought so too, but Mictian said hyperspeed, I figured he knew something I didn't =P. Alright, from now on its hyperspace! =P


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Post  Arashi Storm on Sat Sep 26, 2009 7:41 am

I must have missed his post. Way to go Mictian! Damn privates! hehe
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Post  Mictian on Sat Sep 26, 2009 8:19 am

Oh really? I read from somewhere that it was hyperspeed, no matter... HYPASPACE IS STILL AWESOME!!!! Very Happy

*Made some changes to my posts so that I'm not the only pilot, haha, I'm just the one that has coordinates to the damn place Laughing
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Post  Carlen Darko on Sat Sep 26, 2009 8:40 am

My favorite, "...as she narrowly avoided running over a T3 Utility droid as the wheeled by, happily chirping and beeping to it self..." Very Happy
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Post  Arashi Storm on Sat Sep 26, 2009 9:10 am

Carlen Darko wrote:My favorite, "...as she narrowly avoided running over a T3 Utility droid as the wheeled by, happily chirping and beeping to it self..." :D

Yup, that was a nice line Kev.
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Post  Kevlar on Sat Sep 26, 2009 9:45 am

haha, it actually contained a typo =P I went back and fixed it.

One of the things that helps bind the story together is incorporating other character's scenes into your own, it also helps people construct a more coherent chronological order of events.

For example just by reading that line you know that the entire scene starts before Carlen's scene but the rest takes part during and after it.
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Post  Kevlar on Sun Sep 27, 2009 5:12 am

Just for the narrator scenes, does every one mind picking a color for their dialogue if you haven't already?

Remember after I post the narrator piece, if you'd like to change your character's dialogue (ie how they speak, what they say it etc) just pm me what you'd like me to change it to, as long is it gets the overall job done I've no problems with altering huge bits of it.

Even if it doesn't get the job done in quite the way I'd like it to, its still up for discussion if you think they story could be better taken in another direction, remember that's what OoC is for.

For now though could you finish up your ship scenes and pick a dialogue color? Thanks

The colors already.

Arashi: White
Alicia: Dark Red
Lita: Red (though technically Lita can't speak)
Carlen: Yellow (not sure if you want to distinguish your droid with a separate color)
Tyren: Green

I think we still need colors for Jeme and Mictian
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Post  Carlen Darko on Sun Sep 27, 2009 7:09 am

Kevlar wrote:
Carlen: Yellow (not sure if you want to distinguish your droid with a separate color)

Yellow for Carlen is perfect.
Tee Bee will have Violet.
I am done with posting ship scenes; I'll wait until we arrive to post again.


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Post  Arashi Storm on Sun Sep 27, 2009 7:34 am

White works for me. I don't think I have anything else to add before we land unless you need me to.
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Post  Mictian on Sun Sep 27, 2009 7:44 am

I never really did get the whole colour thing down, so anything that's easy to read works with me ^^ and meh, as long as you've read our character sheets, I don't think there's gonna be a problem kev Very Happy
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Post  Tyren Vaal on Sun Sep 27, 2009 8:19 am

I am fine with Green.
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Post  Jeme'Maer on Sun Sep 27, 2009 10:39 am

I would be just fine with indigo, since green has already been taken.
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Post  Tyren Vaal on Sun Sep 27, 2009 11:55 am

Jeme'Maer wrote:I would be just fine with indigo, since green has already been taken.

I could always give Green to you though seeing as it does fit you well. Tape
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Post  Kevlar on Sun Sep 27, 2009 12:48 pm

Alright, well, I've just used the colors you guys have used so far for your scene's Dialogue.

Another thing, I'm currently reading back all your characters bios and the 'previously on OUF Ship Down' and I've noticed that there are no clear rank designations, its makes writing dialogue a little bit tricky.

So another thing I need from you are rank and specialty (if there is a job name then that too).

For example so far that I know of.

Vly - Jedi, Captain
Carlen - Jedi?
Jeme - Jedi?
Alicia - Specialist (Equiv Rank. Captain)
Tyren -
Mictian -

This is just for story purposes, the OUF is not anal about chain of command, so if your character has something useful to add, then don't wait for someone to give you orders to do so.

As for the landing sequence, its taking a little longer then I thought it would, but I should post the first half or 1/3 by later/soon.
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Post  Tyren Vaal on Sun Sep 27, 2009 1:02 pm

From what I know Mictian is helping pilot though you can wait for his response over mine.

Tyren doesn't have any specific role/specialty, besides being a Soldier he is a demolition specialist.
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Post  Kevlar on Sun Sep 27, 2009 1:30 pm

omfg!!!!! I Just accidentally hit page back on my mouse and lost like an entire page worth of writing!! Fuck!

Guess it'll teach me to periodically back up work.
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Post  Kevlar on Sun Sep 27, 2009 2:03 pm

I'll probably post the first part of the scene transition sequence when I'm done and complete it tomorrow. Just so you guys can read whats gone on so far and demand rewrites =P haha

just by very rough calculation I'd say that was part 1 of maybe 9 or 12. I'm beat and a bit pissed off at my own stupidity so I'm going to call it a night and get back to it in the morning.

Remember let me know if you want to change something? I guess this is just as well that I post it stage by stage, it allows you guys to change the dialogue if you feel the need to do so.
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Post  Quinlan Sa'athis on Sun Sep 27, 2009 4:22 pm

You are right that OUF is not anal about rank and its a good read so far.
I find my immersion lost a little when a Jedi Master allows first a blaster in his neck and then a sabre thrown at him.....
LOL if either of these had been tried on Quinlan the results would have been much different.

If the whole point of this is fun and nothing more then do what you like, if however your building on the lore of OUF then I would recommend you tone down the disrespect.

Looking forward to the next installment.
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Post  Mictian on Sun Sep 27, 2009 4:33 pm

Nice job kev Very Happy that one made me ROTFL, HAHA!! XD Loving the result so far, keep em coming ^^

Oh and quin just gave us an epic idea, about building on OUF's lore, any thoughts? >.> As for Mictian, he's just a private for now, hehe, maybe a promotion after the mission is over O.o LOL!


From my posts in this RP and the ones (well, one, singular) in the OUF temple RP, I'm building a history of what he did in the military so maybe he could get a specialisation soon, to be revealed (In the RP) after we land =D I'm open to suggestions, although I'm thinking along the lines of VIP Protection or Assassination Surprised
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Post  Kevlar on Sun Sep 27, 2009 5:06 pm

thanks for reading quin, though I'm not too sure if this is suppose to be OUF lore, its my impression that this is for fun? I'm not sure about the others, thats my impression atleast.

I'm seriously not picking crap here, but could you clarify on what you mean by disrespect? I admit I'm a little bit confused as to the specific parts that seem disrespectful, and to who?

I think the part where Arashi wrote about Alicia shoving a pistol into Vly's neck was to illustrate her supernatural reflexes and hair-trigger nature and the part where Jeme lobs a lightsaber at him was to show how distracted and fatigued/jumpy he was. I think it kind of serves the purpose to painting the picture that everyone is on edge about the mission, create a bit of sense of unease?

I thought Vly handled both incidents quite well, though I tried to divert the scene with the blaster a little.

Are those two scenes what you mean by disrespectful?


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Post  Tyren Vaal on Sun Sep 27, 2009 5:09 pm

Kevlar wrote:omfg!!!!! I Just accidentally hit page back on my mouse and lost like an entire page worth of writing!! Fuck!

Guess it'll teach me to periodically back up work.

Couldn't you have just clicked forward and it would come up with the information again? That usually works for me whenever I do that.
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Post  Kevlar on Sun Sep 27, 2009 5:09 pm

Tyren Vaal wrote:
Kevlar wrote:omfg!!!!! I Just accidentally hit page back on my mouse and lost like an entire page worth of writing!! Fuck!

Guess it'll teach me to periodically back up work.

Couldn't you have just clicked forward and it would come up with the information again? That usually works for me whenever I do that.

nope, when I forwarded all of it was gone =(
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Post  Tyren Vaal on Sun Sep 27, 2009 5:10 pm

Kevlar wrote:
Tyren Vaal wrote:
Kevlar wrote:omfg!!!!! I Just accidentally hit page back on my mouse and lost like an entire page worth of writing!! Fuck!

Guess it'll teach me to periodically back up work.

Couldn't you have just clicked forward and it would come up with the information again? That usually works for me whenever I do that.

nope, when I forwarded all of it was gone =(

Damn. Happens I guess.
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